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There's nothing wrong with embracing tropes, its just all how you present it. I would have done something like this, just off the top of my head:

"But who are you?"

"Names names names... so...

In concept I do really like it. Edonil hit the grammar issues I had.

I know its not done so something I'd suggest looking into is the dialog. Its just a bit stiff. The "I have many names" trope...

(Well here's the round's piece. Please, have at it. Enjoy it. Comment and critique it up. Thanks for reading ladies and gentlemen)

“I know this place.” He remembers the manor is dark and sleeping...

So I read all the way through and id comment at length but again... cell phone.

What I can say at the moment is that its very readable and well edited. There is a use of "you're" when it should...

just glad to have reads sir. You can like any part you please :)

(I'm working on a Hoffman crew and i usually don't write my intro pieces until the crew is done but for whatever reason this one just needed to get out. It's my take on Hoffman and his relationship...

So it was brought up in another thread but i think it bares mention here and hopefully is worthy of your support.

Its hard to get comments from those that read the stories posted here. Often times...